Jan 232015
It was Saturday morning when I woke up to a squeaking coming from down stairs.
What could it be i thought to myself as i slowly climbed out of my bed.
Could it be my pet hamster playing i crept down the stairs.
ARGHHHHH! there in front of me was the ugliest looking alien he had three eyes.
Then he touched me on the head “What was that i could feel?” i was floating in the air like a bubble.
Then suddenly i dropped closing my eyes when i opened them i was in bed it was all a dream.
Well done Nicholas! This was a really exciting story with a great problem! I have highlighted in bold the parts that I really liked.
Next time remember capital letter and full stops – think about where a new sentence is starting!
Keep up the good writing!
Miss Speake