Olivia Queeney 100 word chaleng

 Posted by on October 1, 2014  News  Add comments
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One day I was playing in my bedroom on my ps3 ( little big planet) and my  mum called me for my tea. I ate all of, it of course I did eat all of it, it  was my favoret mashedpotato and beans and saseges. I had my usual glass of milk then I went upstairs to find  my bedroom was trashed. As I looked around I screemed and my mum ran up the stairs and she said to me “who did this. I said “I do not know.” She was angry I could see it in her eyes she grounded me for a week of my ps3.

  One Response to “Olivia Queeney 100 word chaleng”

  1. What an interesting story – it’s left me wondering what could have happened to your room whilst you were eating your tea and I can imagine all sorts of exciting possibilities.
    I really liked your use of ‘I could see it in her eyes’ to describe your Mum’s anger.
    Try to spend a little time checking your work for spellings before you post and perhaps try reading it out loud to check that it sounds correct.
    I really look forward to reading another piece of your writing in the future.

    Mrs Godding
    Team 100WC

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