Oct 212014
One stormy night I went for a walk. I went in the woods and I saw a black sculptor. It was as black as the night sky I was terefid to see the sculptor move its arms crossed to straight. I ran backwards . It started to follow me so I ran faster! By the time I got home I turned around and it had gone. I ran back, and it was back at the sign and the same tree.I was really scared.
HOW DID HE GET THERE!!!!!!!!!
What a great piece of work you opening sentence really captures the readers attention! You have also used a simile- as black as the night sky- which really helps the reader to imagine what it is like.
Just have a little look, you need a comma on the third line down between me and so this is because the word ‘so’ is a conjunction which means it is connecting two sentences together.