Jan 122015
One day a little boy called Tommy went out into the forest with his two friends James and Flynn. Suddenly they all saw a saw and wood lying on the ground. They dared each other to cut the wood. Everyone of them said no except Tommy so as he started they all cheered. But sadly he pricked his finger on a prickly plant. So he went home and put cold water on it and it immediatly stopped. So then they all went to the park and went on the swings, slide and round about. Tommy, James and Flynn really, really enjoyed themselves.
well done Haadiya I loved your story it was great
I liked your adverbs