Oct 232014
Along time ago there were two girls called Amber and Ruby . One day they went to the woods and saw a statue which they didn’t like. A few hours later they saw the statue was gone, then they heard another person breathing ”is that you Amber ” said Ruby ”no” she replied, then they looked behind them and saw the statue standing right there. They ran faster and faster and could not stop to catch one breath .Finally they reached the other side of the woods and climbed high to a tree. Had they escaped?
i like your story and i like the names 🙂
I liked your punctuation!!
I liked the way you used past tense!!
I liked your connectives
W:Your story could improve by adding adjectives!!
good story :]
thank you.