Oct 012014
As I looked around I saw a gigantic firework burst out into the cool, dark night sky. Then suddenly another fire work boomed into the air and it was so hot that it made us warm. Finally the fire works ended and we all went home and had a warm cup of coffee. Also we all snuggled up in bed and fell asleep. The next morning we went out to a shop to buy our own fire works. Next we put the fire works up at night and they looked beautiful.
You’ve used some great descriptive words here Haadiya, for example ‘gigantic’ rather than plain big. Or ‘boomed’ rather than flew – this helps the reader imagine the sounds as well as the sights. I wonder what words you might have chosen to help us also remember the smells at a firework display? I guess you could even go further and describe the tastes and touches too; all the senses!
Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.