Sep 242014
One day a monster was eating tea and he didn’t know were his mum and dad were so he went up stairs and checked the kitchen finally he looked in there bedroom . They wasn’t there but suddenly there was a soft crocodile eating some fruit which was a pear orange and a pepper. He was terrified it chased him all over the house but he was faster than the colossal crocodile. So I hid before he can catch me and I hide in a cubard it was pitch black I herd a door slam he was gone my parents were there.
Hi Jack
You have a great imagination and told a scary story.
Think about using punctuation to make the story even scarier!
There were some spelling errors and you “forgot” something.
Reading out loud can sometimes help to put the . , ; in the correct places.
GregT
thank you for the greatest comment ever
well done you deserve a round of the clows
Do you mean ‘a round of applause’, Charlie?
🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂