Sep 242014
Today is school trip day just for me, miss Speake, Ruby and Amber I’ve got to go bye…. Righty then here I am on the coach going to the museum with Ruby and Amber at each side of me and guess what were almost there AWESOME. Oh my gosh I cant breath it’s [sigh] we have to go in now. ”wow look at that crocodile ”But as soon as I ”Hello ladies I’m pepper the orange crocodile and my scales are very soft I also forgot what I just said but as soon as the crocodile …..
Brilliant story Jenna. But I’m not sure that last sentence makes sense. To make it make sense you could put But then something amazing happened “Hello ladies etc.
I think before you wrote I’ve got to go bye you could of done a comma.
Alright I will.
good work Jenna keep working