Dec 112014
On a frosty Christmas morning Jenny [an eight year old girl] woke her mother up bright and early to ask her to come downstairs to open there presents with each other. Jenny’s mother had hidden a big red parcel at the back of the Christmas tree. When they had opened the rest of there presents Jenny went to the back of the christmas tree and found a big red box and it was for her. As Jenny opened it she found a wonderful sparkling pink and purple mermaid tail. ”WOW thank you ” said Jenny. As they had a celebration Jenny said thankyou, very politely.
I liked it when you did wow in capital letters.
i rirley like it when jenny found the pink and porple mermaid tail
good i like it ashley it has full stops