Oct 012014
One sunny day two little girls called Haadiya and Monica were playing on the swings infront of there lovely palice the queen was inside in the shower having a wash . Also the dog was playing with his teddy all the family was doing something busy. As Haadiya looked around there was a …Boom!.. a explosion came so they all went inside the palice ”mummy Iam scared,,cried the two princesses . The queen hugged them tightly and they all hid behind the door before there was another bang ”oh no,,theres another bang coming quickly hide . come over hear hide hide
Well done Monica, really good use of adverbs such as tightly and quickly, which we have been practicing in class. You missed some important punctuation – can you spot anywhere you should have included it?
Miss Speake