Oct 012014
one day there was a girl and her mum. They both notice a big zoo with lots of lion’s they looked friendly but my mum wold not take
a risk. She said don’t go near them they might bite your hand off. But she did not listen she went Nair the lion’s and tigers but they didn’t do nothing. So they sat with the lion’s and the tiger’s then we got told off by the zoo keeper .Then we was band from the zoo for life so we went home and had a cup of tea and biscuits.
I like your story Taylor, but you forgot to include the prompt ‘as I looked around’! You used a variety of connectives such as ‘so’ and ‘but’ which is great to see!
Lions and Tigers don’t need apostrophes. Do you know why?
Miss Speake