Oct 212014
When I got closer I herd a big boom I was on the floor.The shadowy figer put its arms in the air and said boo. I was terrified so I ran arownd the woods. When I was in the the middle of no where I said I think I have lost him then suddenly something tapt me on the back and it was him he tide me up on a tree trunk I said what do you want he said “I want you”. I said no he cut me free and said go now or I will kill you.To be continud.
Hi Taylor, this is a very exciting story and I like the way you have kept the reader’s attention at the end. I would love to know what happens next! I also really like your use of interesting descriptive words like ‘shadowy’ and ‘terrified’. Next time, perhaps you could use a dictionary or spellcheck to help you with your spelling as this will really help to improve your work. Well done!