Sep 242014
Cautiously me ,Charlee ,Jack and Aiden ran up to the soft tyres just then we smelt pepper ,pepper was our worst enemy , we absolutely hate pepper it is more worse than salt,kechup and vinegar . We ran into school because we,we sort of snuck out of school.We all saw a bright orange tree. I mean , the whole tree was orange , even the tree trunk! well in the schools swimming pool there was a dark green ( as green as dark green tree leaves) CROCODILE! we screamed so loud “AARRGGHH””CROCODILE!” we screamed again , we forgot to go home again …
What an exciting story! Great use of imagery, I could see the orange tree in my mind. A few grammatical errors, but overall an excellent entry into this weeks 100 word challenge!
I agree.:)
good story liv 🙂