Oct 012014
Today as I looked around… I could see a, I think it was like a castle thing in the distance with like four castles all attached onto one big huge castle . As I tried to go in it wouldn’t let me in but suddenly the door sprigged open and I face planted the floor suddenly I ran up the stairs all I could see were skeletons ( But these weren’t real skeletons instead of having nothing they had bows and arrows attached to them … BOOM… the castle blow up on me, little and big pieces on me I thought I broke myself …
Good story Olivia, I like how you described the castle as ‘in the distance’. You missed some full stops where you should have ended the sentence. Can you spot where? Remember to check your sentences throughly.
Miss Speake
I like what you have put in your story.
i rely liked that story you had lots of punctuation (: (:(: (: