Jan 232015
THE night was dull Maddison was asleep when CRASH!!! they was a hunted dress it was moving like a slow bird . Maddison slowly got up and as soon as she got up her eye`s were as red as blood. Her mum was so scared she ran out of the room. Maddison went down stair`s and followed her terrified mum. the blue mysterious dress was controlling her so she colden`t get out of it. Suddenly Maddison came out of the curse . she grabbed a knife and ripped the dress and it died Maddison went back to bed she was all alone. the next day the dress was once more alive…
Wow, Maddison, I love this story – how scary! I highlighted n bold the bits I really like; you used some great similes. A really exciting problem too!
Next time you really need to work on your capital letters and full stops – remembering them would have made this even better!
Well done!