Oct 212014
Once there was a killer person called the grim reaper he’s meant to be a killer but i wonder if he really is. One day we went to an art school and we were drawing the grim reaper. Then Nathan said ”who is that?”. ”He is an alien he is so horrible I can’t even look at him” I replied. The night after we went into the woods and we saw a man standing right beside a grave. ”Stand back that is the grim reaper if you dare come in he will tie you up. What happened next is another story.
There is a sequel? I like the cliffhanger. Is the grim reaper actually a killer?
I liked that you have used good adjectives
I liked that you have used good openers.
I liked your fabulous punctuation.
I think that you have to use more connectives.
creepy but good