Oct 212014
One Halloween night we went to the deep dark woods. Suddenly we saw a really scary statue staring at a grave right in front of a tall tree he turned around I couldn’t believe it he had no face and had a black cloak. ”RUN THAT IS THE GRIM REAPER” Nathan shouted.” If you dare come into my woods I will tie you up” grim reaper grumbled. Then we ran to my house and we were safe, but not for long. The Grim Reaper had followed us to, I was terrified.Then Nathan said ”shall we go and see were grim reaper is”.”Shshsh”I whispered. We went out an we saw him catching someone….!!!
COOL AIDEN
i think it was good but you could of put in advebs but well done 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂 🙂
Wow, Aiden: I really enjoyed reading your short story about the scary Hallowe\’en night. I like the way you punctuated your speech – well done! I wonder who the reaper had got at the end?
Great writing Aiden, you have used the prompt well to create an interesting piece. Couple of small errors but I certainly enjoyed reading your writing. Thanks,
Ms McGrath (Team 100WC), Australia
Aiden what was your grim reaper doing tying people up??? I wish there were more words in this challenge so I could see what happens next. Great spooky story!
cool good story
I like your story because you are good at adding conectives but I think you should put some more adverbs
could you give some examples?
your story is amazing I really like it 🙂