Dec 052014
Two years ago there was a diminutive girl called Emma. she was 9 years old . On Saturday all of her family went to the golden beach. So at the beach Emma was building sand castles and went in the salty sea. Suddenly Emma saw a rusty ship . All of the windows were smashed all onto the sand and the base was brown. She called her mum and dad so they came. They saw a ghost and the ghost was white like a bed sheet. It killed her mother and father . It also knocked her out. SHE CANT REMEMBER THE REST.
Yikes Maddison, what a scary story! I like the cliffhanger and the end. You also used some interesting vocabulary. Next time try and use some more exciting connectives other than just ‘and’ and ‘so’.
thank you miss speake.