Oct 012014
Suddenly as I looked around I saw a humongous castle.slowly I walked down the misty path and my hart was so fast I cadent breathe. slowly I stopped I felt like a lion was creeping behind me. Just then I knocked on the door it opened .so I went in and I saw skeletons hanging of the roof and had goo all over, it was disgusting. Quietly I walked up stairs and saw a see though ghost and I tried to go though but it wont so I tried again but I got knocked out. I cant remember the rest … it was cold it was scary.
WOW Maddison, what a scary story! I love how you have included adverbs such as quietly and slowly which we have been practicing in our literacy lessons. You missed some places where you should have ended the sentence with a full stop or used a connective. Can you spot where?
Miss Speake